My dear friend Miss Elliot (seriously go check out her blog - she has the most adorably-written posts and all that jazz) suggested I'd do a post filled with snippets of my current novel, 'At the Wrong Side of the Ocean.' Seeing as I don't have much time to make posts, this is a perfect one for me. It might be ludriculously boring for you, though, but hey, just so long as posts keep on popping up on the surface, ey, ey?
‘I’ll
only tell you if you promise you won’t ask me why I’m not fighting.’
‘I
wasn’t planning to.’
‘That’s
good.’ He smiled kindly. ‘I’m twenty – I’m not like most of my friends, who
yearned to enlist as soon as War broke out. Some of them went at a sure young
age, pretending they were a year older; no doubt they weren’t the only ones. I
wasn’t keen at all – lost my father in the other War, don’t like the sound of
fightin’. But yeah, I’m twenty now and I’ve got to register for training. Will
be leaving in several months and I’m not counting down the days.’
Laura
smiled through her chatters and heavy blankets. ‘You didn’t have to explain.’
‘No,
it’s good if you understand.’ Andy was looking at the crackles in the
fireplace, and he talked to Laura as if he was talking to himself; daydreaming.
‘But of course, I want to do my part and all that. Don’t think I don’t, ‘cos I
do. But fightin’ – I’m just not really attracted to the idea. But I’m going to
go, and I’m going to try to put my heart in it and do it for our country.’
James and Spencer were anywhere
but in the sight of their family members – dodging between the cheering and happy
multitudes, crawling under legs and arms, whisking the best food from the
tables, and running to calmer and inky-evening-black places with trees,
climbing as high as they could and devouring their sugary treasures whilst
sitting there. The trees they climbed in stood solemnly at the side of the park
in the town, in black shadowy corners, set apart slightly from the people, who
were slowly going home one by one, holding lanterns and chattering with laughs
fading softly as they walked further.
‘Hey Spencer,’ James began. His
accent had become quite American by now. ‘I finished my doughnut. Shall we go
down again for more?’
‘No, wait, I still have a few
more bites to go,’ Spencer said from the dark. The branch he was sitting on
cracked melodiously.
‘Hey Spencer,’ James started,
thinking of a sudden something.
‘What?’
‘The War’s ended. That means I’ll
be going back home, right?’
Spencer said nothing for a
minute. James thought he was busy eating his whatever-he-had-got, but Spencer
was, in fact, seeping that thought in, very upset about it. He and James had
done practically everything together for four years.
‘I bet you’re happy,’ Spencer
said after a while.
‘Yes,’ James replied. ‘Sure am!’
‘Okay, let’s go and get some more
now.’ Spencer didn’t want to think about James leaving today. He really wasn’t
ready for it.
The main things that peak out
when I think back is me scraping that tin plate and gazing at the food in the
market. There was a market every Tuesday, and mother would go there to buy the
essential things. I would gaze at the meat, dripping with fat and drizzling
with beautiful rich oil. I would stand in front of all the Christmassy puddings
and dumplings, pastries, walnut-balls clumped together with maple syrup and
mouth-watering chocolate, gazing with my young blue eyes, the words of my
father rolling and re-rolling inside my brain. ‘One day, Charley. One day, an’ soon Charley. All the chocolate you
want, why that’s a no-brainer!’
So he stopped for the last time
at the little white house with purple fall leaves scattered over the porch. He
found Rose alone outside; he wondered if she had been waiting for him. ‘Hello,
Jonathan,’ she said.
‘Rose, hi.’
‘What’s the matter?’
‘You know – my dad reminded me of
this yesterday – you know that it’s illegal for whites to marry blacks?’
Rose’s happy youthful face sprung
to a grave grey. She said nothing.
‘I think we should stop this
then. Before it gets too – serious.’ Jonathan hated to put an end to this
beautifully fresh and moist and blossoming relationship. It was so young, but
yet so old. It was a beautiful relationship – all fluttery, like white, white
lace curtains fluttering delicately in gentle spring wind. But he had to end it
– it just wasn’t possible.
‘Yes,’ said Rose.
‘Goodbye then.’
‘Goodbye.’
Harper got a pair of sailor
palazzo pants – something which she never got to wear; it was totally out of
her comfort zone (but never mind, because Lottie stole the piece) – five
blouses with jumbles of cheery patterns, prickly woollen cardigans with buttons
that looked like coloured chocolate, skirts with flexible material just rough
enough to look professional, two ordinary dresses – one blue, one dark rosy –
and a pink Sunday dress with wave-like tiny pleats, a frippery furbelowed lace
collar and satin trimmings made of flippery material that jaunted like
butterfly kisses. Harper was so in love. It was the nicest dress she had ever
owned. She generously told Tatty and Lottie they could borrow it now and then,
but she was so happy that the gorgeous gentle thing belonged to her.
By ten o’clock, Lottie was
snoring already, but Tatty and Harper were relaxing wide-eyed and dreamily in
the dark bedroom. They heard Jacky and Tote washing up plates in the kitchen,
and talking together in low voices they couldn’t quite grasp.
And then they heard their
doorbell ring.
The Gab’s had an old doorbell,
one that went ting-ting and then seemed to bong in circles, wavering with
trills in the air. In the daytime it had a cheery sphere to it, an Easter-like
sphere. But at ten o’clock, in a black, bat-like, cold, wet November night, the
sound made Harper’s wild thoughts jump into haunting conclusions, and she felt
like screaming.
‘Who could that be?’ she whispered.
‘Dunno,’ whispered Tatty back.
‘Shall we have a look?’
Harper and Tatty crawled out of their
soft eiderdowns, and tiptoed with their bare feet under their silk winter
pyjamas into the hall, arm in arm, making an adventure of it. They bent over
the banisters trying, listening carefully. Tote had just opened the door;
Harper could hear it was raining outside.
‘What is it?’ Tote asked. There
was not a trace of laughter left in his voice anymore.
‘You know it,’ answered the
guest. It was a low voice, with an even worse crackle than Tote’s. It sounded
zooey and zappy and drunk. Harper clamped Tatty’s hand. It was Miranda Kerr!
Miranda Kerr, approaching a house different to her own! Miranda Kerr in front
of their doorstep! Miranda Kerr! That
lady with witchy liquor smell fuming from her old skin, crinkled with grey
lines; that lady with violent bronze eyes, glaring war-like at every obstacle
that passed her – here! Harper desperately wanted to go down and look. She imagined the big spider-web
bunch of hair, looking all ghostlike with raindrops mingled all inside; and she
imagined her wearing a stinky over-coat, drenched to the skin, and looking
violently at Tote. But Harper didn’t move a muscle, and neither did Tatty. They
wanted to go, but they were scared and cold and frozen quiet, leaning their
hair curlers against the banister, because they wanted to catch every word
going on down there.
‘Yes, I know why you’re here.’
said Tote. He sounded calm, but firm. It was a voice that knew it was going to
win. Not a voice that tried to win,
and voice that knew it. ‘But,’ he
went on, ‘I don’t see why it would change anything.’
‘You kidnapped the boy.’
‘You mistreated him.’
‘I didn’t, you scull-head, you!’
She spoke with puffs and husky terrors.
‘Mrs Kerr,’ Tote said
professionally, ‘I found James Tucker lying unconscious on the ground, his face blue
with coldness, and purple strokes of bruises on his legs. Yes. What have you to
say.’
Please mark that theses snippets aren't yet properly edited, and all that, so excuse the perhaps-wrong-sounding sentences and typos. I hope you liked them, though. :-)







Awwww, thanks for the shout-out! It made my day. :-)
ReplyDeleteOH ROSE AND JONATHEN I DON'T EVEN KNOW THEM BUT I WANT THEM TOGETHER. Sad, angsty sadness.
Good gracious, that Mrs Kerr. Spooky, she is.
Oh, I love that bit about the two boys up in the tree with their unknown goodies. :-) You have SUCH a way with words, m'dear.
Oh, I want to KNOW who all these people are, and if they get married, and if they're happy, and so on. Gah, I can't wait. :-)
Okay, first o' all, I LOVE the title of your novel!!!! 0.0
ReplyDeleteSecond, those are great snippets! I especially like some of the phrases, and the descriptions, oh my!:D
And beauteous pictures, as always:)
Miss Elliot, no, no, no, it's the other way round - YOU made MY entire day! Thank you so much for your lovely comment. I can't tell you how AMAZING it feels when people SHIP my CHARACTERS. WOW I FEEL SO HAPPY THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU.
ReplyDeleteI hope you'll be able to read this one day - I'm not finished with writing it, though, so it's not for very soon yet.
Again, thank you for your lovely comment. :-)
Olivia, aww you're sweet! I love my title too. Sometimes I think it's too long, though. :-/
Haha, yes, the pictures. I love them too. :-)
~ Naomi
Naomi, this is awesome! I loved getting a little window into your novel. :-) I can't wait for the day when I'll be able to hold it in my hands and read it!
ReplyDeleteYour WORDS, girl. They're perfectly arranged and executed. Very well done.
You're an amazing writer, dear friend. :-)
~Emma
Oh my word, Naomi. This. Is. Amazing.
ReplyDeleteNot only is your title amazing but your snippets were SO SO good. Your words and sentences and descriptions.....
YOU NEED TO WRITE THIS BOOK AND PUBLISH IT. I am dying to know the whole story!!
Goodness Emma and Natalie, THANK YOU. *sniff* I don't deserve these caps and compliments! I hope you'll be able to hold an actual finished copy of the book one day! Praying it will happen... :-)
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